Whee! And she reaches the end! I enjoyed this immensely and it's kept me busy on and off for days! :D
Loved the actions scenes and the h/c. You write that stuff so well, with the pacing fast enough that I find myself holding my breath anxiously. :)
Was that John checking up on the boys in the hospital? That one line is so curious. As Rinkle said, i wondered about them enrolling in the uni, but you did seem to hang a lantern on it, so it didn't bother e so much after that.
I could really see Deputy Graham in my mind's eye too, which is refreshing in an OC.
In conclusion, thanks for the read! Very nicely done! :D
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Date: 2008-10-11 10:10 am (UTC)Loved the actions scenes and the h/c. You write that stuff so well, with the pacing fast enough that I find myself holding my breath anxiously. :)
Was that John checking up on the boys in the hospital? That one line is so curious. As Rinkle said, i wondered about them enrolling in the uni, but you did seem to hang a lantern on it, so it didn't bother e so much after that.
I could really see Deputy Graham in my mind's eye too, which is refreshing in an OC.
In conclusion, thanks for the read! Very nicely done! :D